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"Run!" yelled the zookeeper with fright.
Slowly did I realize that he yelled "run" because all the animals were escaping! So I simply followed instructions and ran like my butt was on fire! Running and running finally I found an exit. But the tiger was blocking my escape. Then the tiger saw me dead in the eye. So the tiger came closer and closer until....

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  1. I think you should write a "!" after escaping and i think you should write all the animals "were"escaping and after simply make it followed i think thats what you were suppose to say.

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  2. Some parts of your story contradict each other. How can you simply follow instruction but run like your butt is on fire. One is a calm action and the other is a panic action.

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