There I was glazing out side of my rusty old cell. Until my captain (Captain Blackbeard) freed me out with with the rest of the crew. After we all decided around dawn to raid Captain John Snow's ship and take whats rightfully ours. But where will we hide it all? asked one of the pirates yelled. In our chest you buffoon! exclaimed the captain. It was dawn and everyone was prepared. Slowly we walked towards the ship until Captain John Snow approached right in front of me with a gun. Thats when I realized it was all dream.
The Sandwich
"Goodness, that sandwich was heavenly. Thanks for the outstanding sandwich."beamed Allen with full of excitiment. "It's just a sandwich,"mum replied. "You might think it's just a sandwich but that sandwich made me feel energetic. Just like a brand new battery." "Are you okay? You always hated my cooking." Mum said, sounding confused. "Okay, I feel great" "That's good." "Please mom, just please can you make another sandwich?" "You like my cooking?"Mum sniffled with tear rolling down her cheek. "I do!" exclaimed Allen. So his mum hurried to the kitchen and made a sandwich. YEARS LATER "Mum can you make another sandwich?" "Get off your butt and make it yourself!"
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